Hello, Welcome to my first short story! I hope you like it! It's about Jaller and his Gukko bird going on an adventure! Here it is:


"Jaller, did you feed your Gukko Bird yet?", yelled Takua from the other side of the house.
"Uh...I'll answer that in a sec...", he answered. Jaller then grabbed his Gukko Food bag and ran towards the Gukko, who was waiting patiently. "Here's your food!", Jaller said as he very quickly poured the food in the Gukko's food bowl. "Oops!" He realized he had poured way to much, probably because he had been in such a rush! "Nooo, don't eat it all, you could get sick, and then I would have to walk to the mall!" But the Gukko kept on eating, not letting Jaller stop him. Jaller decided to jump onto the Gukko hoping that he would stop it, but when he did jump onto it, the Gukko started to fly in the air, with Jaller on it! "Ahhhhhhhhhh!", he screamed. "What?!?", Takua asked. "I haven't learned how to fly my new Gukko yet!!!", screamed Jaller. Jaller and the Gukko then flew off in the direction of the forest! Jaller started to relax a bit, and just held on tightly onto the Gukko, but still he looked for any place he could jump off and land safely. "There's a place! Oh no, it's 10 feet behind me now." He said that a lot, and then he decided that it would be too hard to land safely on anything, since he was moving to fast. After about 1 hour, he noticed that the Gukko was starting to get tired. He wondered why the Gukko was going this far. Then, all of a sudden, the Gukko slowed down and stopped! "Wha--?" He thought, "Why would this Gukko fly so far and then all of a sudden stop?" When the Gukko bird decended, Jaller jumped off into a tree. He climbed down quickly. He then listened carefully. All he heard was the animals inside the jungle. No sounds of Matoran. He decided to rest under a tree, but then the tree fell over! "What!??" There was a hole, where the tree was sitting on. He decided to go down, since he probably wouldn't be surviving for long anyway. When he was inside the tunnel, the door above snapped shut! "Oh No!!", he said aloud. His voice echoed many times through the tunnel. He kept walking in the dark, wishing he had been like Takua, who always had a lightstone with him. But then he saw a light ahead. He ran towards it, very excited! He discovered that it went up above ground to a small house, with a sleeping Le-Matoran in it. He decided to wake the matoran up. "AHHHHHHH!!!", screamed the matoran when he was awoken. "Who Are YOU!!", he asked. "I'm a Ta-Matoran Named Jaller.".

"Oh, I thought you were someone who was stealing all my stuff."

"Can you help me to get back? Where am I?"

"You are in Lo-Koro, the hidden Koro of Mata-Nui."

"Why is it hidden?"

This used to be a Koro as good as the other ones right now, but about 100 years ago, Makuta had destroyed a huge part of the jungle, and everyone had thought it was us. Le-Koro was the ones who had most thought it was us, partly because they wanted to have the whole jungle to themselves, instead of sharing it with us. A lot of us have decided to become Le-Matoran, so that we didn't have to be part of only a tiny part of the jungle like me and my friends."

"What is your name", Jaller asked.

"My name is Zoku."

"How big is your village, anyway?"

"This village has about 10 matoran in it, the others have decided to join Le-Koro. We 10 matoran are going to try to get our matoran back, so that we can become a better Koro."

"Can I help you?", asked Jaller.

Zoku responded, "Yes you can. Just tell Le-Koro about Lo-Koro, and then maybe they will be nicer and let us share the jungle equally."

"But I have no way to get out of this place!"

Zoku then went out of his hut, and grabbed something. "This will help you." It was a small object that had two buttons on it: One that said on it "Ta-Koro" which was red and the other one said "Le-Koro" which was green.

"Push the Green button", Zoku said. As Jaller pushed it he heard Zoku say, "Goodbye."

Jaller was immediately in Le-Koro. He stopped a Le-Matoran and asked him where Matau, the Turaga of Le-Koro was. "Matau is in that hut right there", he said as he pointed to a big hut. Jaller went to the hut and found Matau there. He told Matau everything he knew about Lo-Koro. After he told everything, Matau said, "We must give them back their half of the jungle, Jaller. Just tell us where to find them. But Jaller didn't know exactly where the place was, but then he remembered his Gukko Bird. "I don't konw, but I do know that I left my Gukko bird there!"

"Then I will send Toa Lewa to find the place with the Gukko Bird in it, and then Lo-Koro will own half the jungle!"

And that was what happened. Lo-Koro was back with half the jungle, and many matoran from Le-Koro went back to their true home, Lo-Koro.

A month later, Jaller was sleeping in his bed at night, when he was woken up! "AHHHH!!", he screamed. But he then realized it was Zoku. "Hello, Jaller. Thank you for helping bring back my Koro! I have brought back your Gukko Bird. Here are some widgets to reward you. Goodbye." Jaller saw him push a button on one of those teleport things he had used a month earlier.

The End

I hope you liked the story! PLEASE reply!

- Jeremysr

P.S. When you make a short stories forum move this into there.

Pretty good story. Oh, and short stories are allowed in here now.

-Of Doom :evilgrin:
EDIT: Oh, and just to do you a favor, I added this to the library.

Zoku... Isn't that your name on BZPower? Godd story, I'll have to admit, but were there any turaga of Lo-koro? Very good story!

Yes, Zoku is my name on BZPower and Bionicle Central. On BZPower I'm Zoku the Turaga and on Bionicle Central I'm Zoku Nuva Toa of Invisibility.

So... Were there any toa or turaga? You still didn't answer me on that one... Right, but good story...(oh, wait, I all ready said that...

Zoku was the Turaga.

-jr

Pretty good! Ok detail, nice storyline, overall I'd have to give it a 7.8/10! Not as much of an epic as a short story, but we don't have short storys here on BGF. Nevertheless, this is still a great SS! Keep up the awesome work!

I didn't even plan it, I just got an idea and typed, not knowing what would even happen...I'll probably write more stories, but no epics or comedies, because I usually don't have enough time to write them and eventually get bored of writing them, which happened to my 3 comedies on BZPower.

- jr

Ya' know, that's kindda how I write My comedys. I just think of something quick, and type it in. I ussually spend about 3 hours a day typing one chapter (cause I gotta edit it) Then maybe go and watch some TV and get more Ideas for my next chapter, or even My next comedy... But none the less, good story...

I like it! I think I use to know you Jr from BZP, I use to be, Aitu Nuva! Did you know me? :unsure: :lol: I'd give it an 8.4, Your story is great!