I call this one "Oblivion". It doesn't rhyme but it's really good.
Beneath the shadowy dephts of an endless abyss'
My spirit takes refuge.
Countless foreign souls surround my frrail and fragile psyche.
I feel afraid. Lost and confused.
"What should I do in this period of waiting before I experience my fated rebirth?"
This unstoppable hysteria is overcoming my subconsciousness.
Devouring my senses, toying with my sensations.
I'm forever locked in a prison of panic.
Living like a heretic and having nothing but nightmares.
Destiny is my enemy, time is my foe.
As I float in oblivion, these two pass.
Waiting for my life to start... A ghost without a shell...
Lingering in anonymity...
A formless entity...
A tiny fragment of the cosmos...
END. Did you like that one? Here's the other one. It's called "Trapped". Now this one rhymes.
Beneath the dephts of an endless abyss,
My spirit takes refuge but something's amiss.
How many times have I stayed in hesitation,
When life itself awaits mezmeration.
Chance for escape is being taken away,
As the clock ticks down, every second, every day.
How to run away... How to break free.
Everything that's happening is happening to me.
There's no escape. I don't know why.
Nothing will occur no matter how hard I try.
But as time passes, one thing is clear.
There is definitely no way out of here...
END. That one sucked. This one is a lot better. 'Tis called "Shame".
Walking down a lonely road.
Filled with shame. A heavy load.
Resurrection's done and gone,
But thoughts haunt my imagination.
Guilt, remorse, embarrassment.
My dignity which these three bent,
Is falling down a road of shame.
What more do I have to gain?
I've lost a lot. Still losing more.
What on Earth is my life for?
Shame is over coming me.
I'm losing all my dignity...
END. That was good. This one's better. "Sorrow".
Being flushed down a world of pretend.
Never making this dreaded misery end.
Being pushed around every second, every day.
Being brought to the ground, Getting in another person's way.
The weight of the world is being brought upon my shoulders.
Like a hundred moons and seven million boulders.
Despair, distress, unhappiness, depression.
Regret, grief, gloom, moroseness, desolation..
All these words destroy my facade.
Annihilating my senses, turning me into a clod.
What's left of my soul is my overflowing sadness.
How am I supposed to stop this growing madness?
I've hit rock bottom. I'm fresh out of bliss.
A shot for joy? I'm probably gonna miss.
I've got no chance. Everything is futile.
I'm trapped in a sad that's so damn senile...
END. That's all I have for now. Once I get through my periodical exams in school, I'll update this. In the meantime, you guys can post your views on my collection.
I'll accept any comments EXCEPT for flames.
wow thats pretty good i dont like to ryhm to but it sounds a lil better wen i ryhm but wen i dont ryhm my true emotion arise from it hahaha well i give this a 4/5 heheh i havnt heard the perfect poem yet heheh
| QUOTE (KeNsHiNhImUrA @ Sep 6 2004, 01:13 PM) |
| wow thats pretty good i dont like to ryhm to but it sounds a lil better wen i ryhm but wen i dont ryhm my true emotion arise from it hahaha well i give this a 4/5 heheh i havnt heard the perfect poem yet heheh |
I made more. What do you think? "Imprisoned"
As I look up into the pitch black sky,
I bother to stop and then wonder why.
My exile from society is getting in my brain,
Painting it so dark, making a permanent stain.
I'm locked away from cilvilization,
The key is lost; I'm in alienation.
This loneliness is driving me crazy,
As the moon drops down and the sun gets hazy.
I've nowhere to go, I've nowhere to run,
I'm trying to find a way to the light of the sun.
Cause I'm trapped in a cave; There is no light,
I'm fighting for justice, I'm fighting for what's right.
I try to find my way through this sable cell,
I sometimes even ponder if I am nearing hell.
But I'm not physically in a cave of rock,
I'm in my mind ,where my thoughts stock.
END. This next one SUCKS. Since my only inspiration is my sadness, this, one didn't turn out too good. I'll just post it anyway. "Love"
What is this overcoming me?
Is this sensation supposed to be?
A feeling which makes me so warm,
I feel protected from any harm.
It all occurs when I'm around,
The one I thought of, sought and found.
This girl brought me out of my black hole.
For once, forever, I feel blessed,
That someone likes me, loves me best.
Our feeling will never go astray,
This feeling called "Love" will always stay.
END. Don't get me wrong. I don't have a girl I truly like. I don't even have a crush. I don't even have a girl (space) friend. I'm really lonely. I only have my best friends with me.......
NEXT. "Impossibilities"
Have you ever wondered when,
Impossibilities happen?
When will I see a petal fall,
Up to the sky on top of all?
When will I see the verdent sea,
Split into two, in front of me?
When will I see the azure sky,
Unfurl it's clouds and let me fly?
When will I see the crmson ground,
Reveal the wonders never found?
When will I see the unseen squalls?
The unfelt glass, the zephyr halls?
They can't be sought, they can't be faced.
Unproven dreams we always chased,
Will not come true, materialize,
They'll never stop, all of these lies.
END. It's not sad, but it's kinda good. I'll add more. Please post your views on these. You can also post your own.
"Something really cool"
Ai, Ah, ooh, eeh, Oh, Ai,
I, one, two, three, four, five,
I Want to see for Phive?!
END. That one's really ingenius!
"Math"
How well do you know your math?
One plus two, you feel my wrath!
Three plus four, get on the floor,
Five plus six, smash through the door!
seven plus eight, you think I'm great?
nine plus ten, ejaculate!
END. Yay! I'm good!
*You're insane!*
I know!!
hey tahts pretty good too yah me too inspiration comes from my emotions but its mostly black in sid wer bitter sadness dwell and well love too but HEY that was good ill post sum wen i i feel more than wat im feelin ahhahaha i rate this poem a B+ hahah
NEXT. "Lost"
I'm stuck in an unending mirror maze of hell,
Lost, damned, fallen, all of these words which spell:
Unfound freedom and undicovered liberty,
Lost in the deepest depths of insanity.
I don't know where to go; everything looks the same.
I can't believe I'm playing a part in this senseless game.
I don't know where I am. Where is the way out?
Nothing will occur no matter how hard I shout.
Nothing to direct me... North, East, South, West,
Trying to navigate out of this torture of a test.
I'm seeing myself all day, my body and my head,
This labyrinth is killing me... or maybe I'm already dead...
END. What do you think?
Wow I’m impressed nicely done. You must have spent a lot of time righting these, they are very deep and well worded much better then anything I could ever right well done.